The Girls Imagination
This is the first paragraph of my silent writing that I worked on with my friend Samantha, the name of the story is "The Girls Imagination".
Her imagination is forcing her to create something that isn’t reality.She is loosing her breath and mind physically and mentally. She can’t stop her mind it’s too late she jumped off the rocky cliff edge her imagination is now her worst nightmare.She plunged into the surging water as she braced herself for the impact holding her breath she sees light as she got closer the bigger and louder it got it was like a strong force was pulling me she could no longer control herself she starts to loose her breath she knew straight away that she would never make it out alive, then all of a sudden she starts to float away from the hole.
Great descriptive vocabulary Alexis!
ReplyDeleteI loved the amazing words you used to describe everything in that paragraph. Make sure you put a space after a full stop! I really enjoyed it and I can't wait to hear more in the future.
ReplyDeleteHi Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI love this story. You described everything really well in each paragraph, It was very fascinating I really enjoyed this.
Malia